LinkedIn Professional Headline: Yours probably sucks

July 14th, 2010 | by Jason Alba |
Comments are now closed. Need help with your Professional Headline? That’s included in the LinkedIn Profile Critique (like this and this) Let me know if you want one.  It is currently priced at $99.

So many times I see LinkedIn Professional Headlines that … well, suck.

Yours probably sucks (unless you got my LinkedIn book or my LinkedIn DVD, as I talk about this quite a bit in those).

Here’s a quick test:

(a) Does your LinkedIn Professional Headline have your TITLE?

(b) Does your LinkedIn Professional Headline have the name of your company?

If it has either of these you have a great chance of having a sucky professional headline.

Why do I say this?

  1. The title doesn’t tell me a whole lot.  If it’s a big title in a small company I’m not impressed.  If it’s a regular title in a company or industry I’m not familiar with, I might not really know WHAT YOU DO.
  2. Beyond that, though, your title doesn’t tell me WIIFM (What’s In It For Me?). I don’t care that you are a CEO, or analyst, or any of that other stuff.  If I SHOULD care, I can find that in the rest of your LinkedIn Profile, right?
  3. Use your Professional headline as a change to educate me on why I should care about you.  Title/company doesn’t do it.
  4. With regard to the company, most companies I see out there have cute names… that mean nothing to me.  They are not branded enough to tell me anything.  Thus, putting the name of a no-name company in your headline does not help me understand your value proposition… IT ONLY TAKES UP SPACE.

How’s your LinkedIn Professional Headline?

Comments are now closed. Need help with your Professional Headline? That’s included in the LinkedIn Profile Critique (like this and this) Let me know if you want one.  It is currently priced at $99.
  1. 115 Responses to “LinkedIn Professional Headline: Yours probably sucks”

  2. By Craig Wiggins on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Okay Jason, I’ll bite. Having read other entries from you and others on this topic, I came up with this: Entrepreneur, technologist, nonprofit leader, international traveler.

    Feedback?

  3. By Ellie Cook-Venezia on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Hi, Jason.

    I just started revamping my LI profile yesterday and will continue to work on it over the next few days. Here’s my headline:

    Enthusiastic Renaissance Woman | Strategic Business Partner | Goodwill Ambassador | Social Media Butterfly

    Thoughts?

  4. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Jason,

    As you know, I’m walking that thin line between a full-time job search and consulting as a new career path. I’m twitching over whether I should use problem-solver in my headline since it is becoming an increasingly common claim. Anyway, here’s the headline, using the philosophy that the goal is to entice them to read more:

    Problem-solver who helps businesses/individuals communicate the true value of their services to prospects and customers

    And for what it’s worth, here’s the first paragraph of my Summary: I help clients sharpen their brand and strategic messages to increase sales and improve RFP and negotiation “close” ratios. And my new Consultant Launch Pad site is helping people — from the long-term unemployed and over 50s to those agonizing about future career paths — generate short-term income and build their businesses.

  5. By Jason Alba on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Take this with a grain of salt – These are my initial reactions.

    Craig – here are my thoughts:

    Entrepreneur – kind of cliche… does your profile (summary) back it up?

    Technologist – okay, this is good … hopefully in your profile I can learn if you are into software, hardware, chips, etc. If it is targeted and relevant then you might consider changing to a more common keyword/phrase.

    nonprofit leader – good on the nonprofit, but what does LEADER mean?

    International traveler – doesn’t interest me unless you can somehow tell me how that is relevant to what you bring to the table.

    —————–

    Ellie

    Enthusiastic – I like it…

    Renaissance – you lost me here… what exactly does this mean? Or, what message are you trying to communicate? I’m left wondering, which isn’t good.

    Woman – I got that from your name… I think this is the first time I’ve seen man/women in a headline. My initial thought? Takes up too much space to not say something critical.

    Strategic Business Partner – starts off cliche but I like PARTNER… makes me wonder what kind of partnerships you have and how we might collaborate.

    Goodwill ambassador – is that for Goodwill, the organization? Or you like all things “goodwill?” I’m confused.

    Social Media Butterfly – I like this… it gives some personality and doesn’t sound like you are the overused “expert” or “guru”… fun. My question – do you bring this butterfly-ness into our relationship or is this just your personal hobby?

    —————–

    Peter, your thin line walking is not uncommon.

    Problem-solver – isn’t that one of the NEVER USE, IT’S OVERUSED phrases? I don’t know but I think all business people, especially executives, are problem solvers. I just became slightly disinterested.

    who helps … —– THIS IS IT – JACKPOT!

    You applied the majic formula… You help [who?] with [what?]

    This is what I’m interested in… this is the What’s In It For Me… Great job.

    Perhaps instead of “problem solver” you are a “consultant’s Consultant” or “Consultant Expert”… that even clarifies it more.

    —————–

    Finally, a point on Peter’s comment… his summary helps support the professional headline.

    These are complementary.

    Thanks for playing you guys… :)

  6. By Steve Duncan on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    I know the headline is key, from my own research, and I did have one that produced good results but since changed it and then forgot what it was – I wish Linkedin had a profile history feature.

    Anyway, some I’ve used recently are:

    Extracting value from data
    Extracting profit from data
    Solving problems others don’t

    I’m not particularly happy with any of them, and would be delighted with any suggestions!

  7. By Jennifer Altimore on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    OK, I’ll bite… here’s mine. I’m ready for it…
    Experienced B-B Internet Marketer focusing on Community based interactive mktg.(social media,email) & web content mgmt.

    http://www.linkedin.com/in/JAltimore

  8. By Haneef N. Nelson on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Hello Jason,

    What about this Headline:

    Innovative Dream Manager Who Helps People and Organizations Achieve Their Dreams and Goals

  9. By Neville Merritt on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    I hope mine doen’t suck too badly, after all I changed it after attending your SMMU course!
    “Advisor on ERP Systems for Food Manufacturers at Aspera Solutions Ltd.” I kept the company name in because it says we are in the computer business. Although I am selling, I have 30 years on both sides so I can give real recommendations. What do you think?

  10. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Steve,
    I’m not sure how long ago your “good” headline ran, but if you go to the bottom of Steve’s Activity and click on the More button it will give you a history of new connections and changes you’ve made to your profile. I’m not sure how far back it goes but maybe you’ll get lucky. Good luck.

    Peter

  11. By Kristin on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Connecting highly talented students with amazing professional and experiential learning opportunities everyday.

  12. By Lou Bonica on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Jason,

    This is one subject I’ve gone round and round on. I’ve always used titles because I’ve been told it helps with recruiter searches. I avoided using available or in transition so as not to sound needy but had several people not realize I was looking. Added that in but so no change. So using your advice he’s the latest. Please let me know your thoughts.

    Business leader well versed in helping your business people communicate with your technical people.

  13. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Jason,
    I hope it’s OK if I put in my two-cents worth on a few of these:

    Lou: I like the thought but there’s no solution baked into it (and it’s a bit redundent). I think most everyone on LinkedIn is a “business leader” so I’d focus more on the idea that you help areas with different objectives like Finance and IT talk to the Business Development and Service people. How about:

    Gets business areas who speak different languages onto the same sheet of music to drive higher revenues and greater cooperation.
    (If you don’t like same sheet of music, go with Brings together business areas who…)

    Haneef: If you haven’t read Patrick Lencioni, you have no idea what a Dream Manager is. Not likely people will search on that term. Beyond that, I’d avoid using it twice in the same headline. It’s a bit ambiguous for me. I really can’t tell from your profile what it is that you do and, as Jason said, the Summary needs to complement the headline. You need a value proposition before you develop your headline.

    Jennifer: Lot of stuff there. Looked at your profile and it looks like you:

    Redesigns websites to drive usability, visitors, and sales while integrating other social media

    Steve: I couldn’t find you on LinkedIn, but I’d make it a bit less ambiguous. What kind of data? What kind of value? That results in what?

  14. By Jason Alba on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    @Peter – totally okay… I’m getting swamped and have to take care of some other things – hope to get back to this tonight or tomorrow… but ya know, deadlines… :p

  15. By Lou Bonica on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Peter,

    Thanks for the feedback. Much appreciated. I took the core message you suggested and worded it a little differently. I dropped the concept of “different languages” because in this age of global commerce I didn’t want someone to take it literally as speaking multiple languages.

    Brings together business and technical areas to drive higher revenues, lower expenses and greater cooperation.

  16. By Haneef N. Nelson on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Peter,

    Thanks for the feedback, and I have read Patrick Lencioni.

  17. By Ed Han on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Peter, you’re so right about lame headlines! Having said that, mine probably sucks, too: you can see it here: http://www.linkedin.com/profile?viewProfile=&key=17344455

  18. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Haneef, I know you have; it’s in your profile. My point was that many people probably haven’t so the phrase will go right past most of them. It’s sort of the same thing with using Seth Godin’s Linchpin description, although there people are probably searching on that term because it’s a skill that is in high demand. Without the context of Lencioni, I’m not sure the phrase will resonate with the people doing the searches. And you certainly shouldn’t use it twice in the headline. Best wishes.

    Peter

  19. By Julie Walraven | Resume Services on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Here Jason: have at it! :-) “I create successful career marketing strategies just for you!”

  20. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Ed…I think you linked to my headline, which I’ve decided was a mistake rather than an indictment of my effort. ;)

    I like Wordsmith, but think you need more than a single word (particularly since few people will search on that word alone for the level of position that I suspect you’re looking for. You need to tell people that you’re a tremendous writer who uses that skill for good. Use words like Clarity or Clear Direction. Your skills probably Drive Employee Engagement or Get Teams Headed in the Same Direction or Clearly Explain a Product’s Benefits. Writers are a dime a dozen, particularly in the current market, so explain why you’re different from a business perspective.

    And just a thought…you are a terrific writer, but you may want to ratchet it back a touch in your Summary.

  21. By Ed Han on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Weird, when I open that link, it’s to my full (not public) profile.

    Good points on both scores, esp the last: that summary’s a smidge purple, isn’t it?

    Thank you for the compliment!

  22. By Steve Duncan on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Peter – worried you couldn’t find me! My public profile is at: http://www.linkedin.com/in/steveduncan

    As for the headline – how about “Attacking business data analysis problems others don’t”

  23. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Steve:
    What’s your skill? Figuring out ways to analyze business data (i.e., data found on a variety of platforms)? Making data actionable? Translating data so that the marketers can sell more effectively? Some combination of that?

    I’m kind of thinking you help clients make better business decisions by aggregating data across a variety of sources and making it actionable for non-techies. That’s too long, but that’s the benefit you bring.

    Another way to look at it: You create tools that enable clients to make data-driven decisions using information across a variety of platforms.

    You have 22 LinkedIn Recommendations. I’ve found that looking at all the comments at once lets you see the big picture of what you do and how people see you. I only took a quick look but I think there’s some good stuff in there that you can use.

  24. By Paula Pilecki on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Jason, I learned about you from SMMU. I’m assisting a friend with her social media strategy. Currently, her line says: Pharmaceutical, Medical Device, and Biotech Consultant.

    How to spice that up?

  25. By Peter Osborne on Jul 14, 2010 | Reply

    Hi, Paula…If this is the person I think it is, I think she needs to work on her Summary and Experience blocks before she writes her headline. Like some of the other headlines, I don’t see what makes her special or differentiates her from other consultants in the same field. I can’t tell why she has two companies bearing her name (although I suspect it has something to do with targeting). And there’s no bullets under any of her jobs; it’s almost as if she lost interest after doing the first three or four.

    She probably gets some search hits because of the jargon in the profile, but I’d want to see a headline that nails what makes her special and then see her first sentence in the Summary say she’s a Pharmacuetical, MD, and Biotech consultant.

    Here’s my guess at what her headline will ultimately look like: Helps Pharma, Medical Device and Biotech companies avoid compliance risk. That would be my conservative approach. My guess is there may be a better word than risk (e.g., nightmares). If she’s really good, she might consider changing Helps to Ensures, unless there are legal risks to saying that.

    The other interesting thing in her Recommendations (BTW, I’d be looking for more than three with her experience and # of Connections) is the idea of a broad network on consultants. At the very least, I’d get that into my Summary and possibly into the headline (e.g., Well-connected).

  26. By Kimba Green on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Great ideas here! The comments are very helpful!

  27. By Steve Duncan on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Peter – Thanks for some really valuable input!

    I think you’re right about the recommendations. My challenge has been distillation rather than fermentation.

    How about:

    I help you translate disparate data into actionable insight

  28. By Paula Pilecki on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Peter — thanks for this feedback. Very helpful. The fact is, she is not simply a consultant; she matches pre-qualified consultants with companies who need their services. I can tell from your advice that, that doesn’t come through at all in her profile.

  29. By Beth Bittenbender on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Here’s my headline – let me know what you think! Keep in mind I’m an SMMU grad :)

    Facilities Management Consultant, Performance Measurement and Management for Janitorial/Custodial Contracts

    http://www.linkedin.com/in/bethbittenbender
    Thanks for your feedback!

  30. By Peter Osborne on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    At first blush, your headline’s punctuation throws me off. That may sound picky but I don’t want that to distract me. Your Summary says you’re in a “highly-focused, niche” consulting business so you may take this critique with a grain of salt, but I’m not clear why I need to have the Premium service to see your Recommendations and Background. Your profile is very jargony, which may be OK for your target customer but I wonder how many new clients you get through LinkedIn.

    Anyway, it appears from your Summary that what makes you unique is your ability to quantify the benefits of a green approach in facilities management. But I have to work very hard to get there. I don’t fully understand the difference between Facilities Management and Janitorial/Custodial Contracts (and whether you really need to make that distinction in your headline. There may be more to your value proposition (as there was with Paula’s friend’s) but that’s what I’m getting at first blush. So you may want to tie together the development of green (or sustainable) Janitorial/Custodial Contracts with the notion of Quantifiable Bottom-Line Benefits (which you know is all some people need to see to convince them to go Green!).

    You also have a couple of typos in your Summary. I might suggest you have someone copy-edit it. I also have to admit that I’m intrigued with how someone goes from managing hospitals to the business you’re in — you might want to consider making that tie in your summary (and open it up to a broader audience). But that part is probably advice better given by Jason, who’s the expert on all this.

  31. By Peter Osborne on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Steve…I think it’s getting closer. The two words I have problems with are disparate and insight.

    I think part of your challenge is determining who hires you — an IT executive or a CEO/CMO. Disparate may work for the IT guy; the others may not know what you mean. How about data from various sources (or platforms). Or are you one of those BI guys who also brings in external data?

    As for insight, it’s a nice word but it’s kind of passive. In the current environment, I think people are looking for help in making decisions. So maybe you add the phrase “to drive decisions” or tweak it to talk about creating dashboards et al that streamline or facilitate decision making. Make your headline something action-focused!

  32. By Nik Palmer on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    My Headline is currently:
    “Part of the Solution, not the problem.”

    In the past it was:

    1. Student of how humans use tech to connect 2. Nerd with recruiting systems kung fu 3. Expert Game Master 4. Musher

  33. By Steve Duncan on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Peter – Thanks again for excellent input. Target is CEO/CMO and occasionally CTO.

    How about: I help translate data from here/there/everywhere into decision-supporting, action-enabling intelligence.

  34. By Peter Osborne on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    I like that much better.

    Jason, what do you think?

  35. By Peter Osborne on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Nik, Nik, Nik…

    I may regret not deferring this to Jason, but here are my thoughts.

    I looked at your profile and I’m guessing you get plenty of work so your LinkedIn headline may be more social that business. After a lot of agonizing, I named my consulting company Bulldog Management Solutions because it tells people something about my personality and my approach. So if you call on me, you know what you’re getting. I suspect it’s the same with you and that you’re probably quite happy with this headline because it’s you.

    If I were writing your headline and wanted to take the same sort of approach but possibly expand the reach, I’d be thinking about using the phrase out of Tammy’s recommendation and go with Expert on All Things Systems Related. Your background supports it, as do the other comments. Then you might add something else that touches on how you support the online recruiting industry (Maybe something like, Streamlines the online application process). Or you could do that with a slightly better organized Summary section.

    Like I said, I’m guessing the people you care about already know who you are and what you do. This headline and profile probably doesn’t help others get to know you better. And that may be OK with you.

  36. By Nik Palmer on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    First off, BOTH of ya’ll deserve some Kudos for taking time to do this. I’ve been a fan of Jason’s work in the industry and will definitely check out your site and material, Peter.

    I hear what you are saying regarding the ‘tell them something about you’ Since I have a decent and strong profile in the recruiting industry, I wanted to focus on NON-recruiting. But all the business process optimization comments are dry and not very compelling. Since I solve problems, I wanted to focus on that.

    Because I am considering new opportunities, I will definitely re-think the systems optimization focus… there has to be a clever AND compelling way to headline that without claiming to be a ninja, expert, or guru.

    PS- I WIN for getting a “Nik, Nik, Nik…” starter. That made me smile much!

  37. By Peter Osborne on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    Glad I made you smile…

    I’m with you on not claiming to be “a ninja, expert, or guru.” How about something like, “Your search for a systems optimization solution (or answer) ends here.” Although I might want you to figure out a better (hipper?) phrase than systems-optimization.

    Jason made the point yesterday (and I agree with it, even though he made the point about my profile) that when everyone is a solution provider it loses its oomph (OK, those weren’t his exact words but this string is getting long).

    I have found it very difficult to crystallize my own brand. Ask the people who are familiar with your optimization skills how they’d describe you. I’ve told some people recently to think of your brand as what you’d want someone to say about you at your funeral. After they talked about all the non-work stuff.

    Good luck.

  38. By Brady Kent on Jul 15, 2010 | Reply

    I’m a student who’s trying to develop a profile to get me started in the internship search for next summer and a job search after that. Needless to say, I could probably use some advice in areas other than just the headline, but here’s what I’ve got right now:

    Student, Anticipator, Problem Solver.

    Thanks for any help guys, I really appreciate it.

  39. By Lyn French on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Peter/Jason

    Here’s my headline, grateful for your feedback:
    Helping businesses providing great customer service to stand out and win more customers.

    Thanks so much

  40. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    OK…Let’s start with Lyn.

    Lyn, it’s not clear to me how you generate revenue from your business so I’m not sure what your headline should be because I don’t know who you’re targeting with your LinkedIn presence. I would think someone whose business (and passion) is spotlighting great customer service would have more Connections (and possibly more Recommendations) so I’m trying to figure out what you want to accomplish before I can suggest a stronger headline. The one you have now makes me say, “Oh, that’s nice,” but it doesn’t have a Call to Action that would encourage me to contact you. And your Summary doesn’t make it easier for me to figure that out.

    Brady: First, let me say that I think it’s terrific that a college freshman (soon to be a sophomore) has a LinkedIn profile. We’ve already discussed on this string that Problem Solver is one of those phrases that you want to avoid because it doesn’t say anything. You’re clearly doing a great job in school. I might flesh out your responsibilities and accomplishments a bit more in your summary or create an Experience section for those two jobs and then go with a headline that tells people what you want, something along the idea of: Bilingual, highly motivated college student seeking challenging (summer?) internship to support my career goals. Jason may disagree, but I don’t think you need to list the areas in your headline. Good luck!

  41. By Lyn French on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Thanks for taking the time to look at min, really appreciate the feedback – you are so right in what you say. I’ve amended the summary so that it’s hopefully clearer now?

  42. By Tonya Hendeson on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Jason,

    Thanks in advance for your help on this.

    My headline is: Senior Sales Executive / Business Development Specialist – Top Producer in Enterprise Software Sales Roles

    Any comments? Suggestions?

  43. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Tonya,
    I think there are some things you need to address in your Summary and Experience sections, and I’d like to see some Recommendations. I also think you need to spend some time adding Connections if you want to send the right message to companies looking to hire you. I’m wondering if you have another LinkedIn profile that you need to consolidate with this one.

    All that said, the headline. What are you looking for? What makes you different from all the other salespeople looking for opportunities? On the surface of it, you seem to be a Top-Producing Enterprise Software Sales Executive. If you want to be edgier, you could say Enterprise Software Sales Executive Who Blows Through (or Far Exceeds) Quotas. But you have a whole other set of experiences and some holes in your Experience that might suppress response.

    For you and everyone reading it, remember Jason (and my) Mantra: What Makes You Different? What’s In It for the Employer?

  44. By Martin Pierce on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Hi, Jason; here’s my headline:

    Facilitating the match between individuals and organizations. Career Management/Employer Relations Professional

    Your thoughts please.

    Thank you.

  45. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Lyn, I think that’s much better and much clearer (although you need to clear up a few typos). Not sure what your business model is, but I think your headline might be more accurate if you say something like,

    Bringing greater visibility to companies committed to providing outstanding customer service.

    I’m guessing companies pay you for the privilege of being listed and ranked, which could lead to some issues over here in the United States but it’s terrific if it works over there. What happens if someone gets terrible service from one of your corporte members? Anyway, best wishes!

    Peter

  46. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Martin, your headline feels very flat. A lot of this depends on who you’re targeting — employers or job seekers, and that’s part of the problem with your Profile. Tell me what you want so I can help you (me, in this case, is the person who is looking at your profile). I’ve seen a lot of headlines over the past few days where it’s not clear who they want to read their Profiles (which is the point of the Headline).

    It looks like you are positioning yourself as being great at (1) placing disabled job seekers; (2) placing people in general; and (3) creating and conducting career-development workshops. I’m guessing that 1 and 3 differentiate you. Those would probably be the things I’d focus on in my Headline and Summary.

    I’m guessing (2) makes you a contingency recruiter since I wouldn’t think the percentage of placements would really be an issue for someone once they have the client, given the number of people out there looking for work (although successful placements in terms of staying with their new company would be important).

  47. By Lyn French on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Thank you Peter, your time and comments are much appreciated.

  48. By John E. Bredehoft on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Jason, Peter, or anyone,

    I’m thinking about using a headline that ties in directly with my summary (I’ve linked to my public profile), and therefore am considering the use of “Bridge between technologists and other professionals.” I’m thinking that “bridge” is unique enough to stand out, but is it going too far?

  49. By Tonya Hendeson on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Peter,

    Thanks for your feedback.

    Re Recommendations: Agreed. working on as we speak.

    Re Connections: Also agree. Just getting started with LinkedIN (less than one month since I purchased Jason’s DVD and created my profile- what a great resource!)

    Re Headline: Really like this. I think I’ll use it!

    Thanks again and I’ll see you on LinkedIN!
    Tonya Henderson

  50. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    John,
    I like the idea of the bridge and think you could actually go further. I’m not clear on what you do from your Profile (or current Headline). Am I correct that you respond to RFPs submitted by other companies on behalf of your employer. If so, that raises the question, are you looking for or thinking about taking your skills elsewhere (or freelancing on the side) because then your headline would be different than just trying to get the attention of other writers who do similar things or explaining what makes you special.

    Bridges connect two things and I’m not sure it’ll be clear to people what you mean by technologists and professionals. Are you better than most other people at translating highly technical stuff into readable, value-focused prose that the marketing guys can understand? Do you do such a good job at writing that value overrides cost and enables your company to get new business at a better margin? Do you write proposals that make it easier for the people responding to submit a response that helps your company find the perfect vendor? Or is your particular skill bringing together all the disparate departments that have to respond to an RFP and getting them to agree and/or not promise something other parts of the company can’t deliver (because that would make you a real hero in the places I’ve worked)?

    Focus on the clarity of the message, not whether a specific word is right or not.

  51. By Lou Bonica on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    John,

    I agree with Peter. While the concept of a bridge connecting two areas is good, it doesn’t highlight what you do (ie the actual skill of writing). Something like “I translate Technology into English” or something along those lines may serve you better.

    Lou

  52. By Peter Osborne on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Lou’s absolutely right…particularly if your client is on the non-technology side of the business. Those guys tend to look at you strangely when you insinuate that they don’t speak English.

  53. By John E. Bredehoft on Jul 16, 2010 | Reply

    Peter and Lou, I thank you for your feedback!

    Jason, I mentioned to Jesse Stay (on Facebook, of course) that you were offering free LinkedIn consulting. His response: “Great! Tell Jason hi for me – he knows LinkedIn!”

  54. By Russ Boreham on Jul 21, 2010 | Reply

    Hi guys,

    Great work you are doing here – if you have time / are still helping, would you mind letting me know your thoughts?

    | Well-connected, affable Recruitment Partner who helps the UK’s most salient organisations find Project Manager resources

    Many thanks

    Russ

  55. By Peter Osborne on Jul 21, 2010 | Reply

    Hi, Russ…

    Interestingly, your Summary focuses on the people looking for work while your headline focuses on your corporate clients. I think the Summary gives me a good feel for you, but could be tightened a bit and focus on both sides of the equation.

    As for the headlines — and I may be completely off-base not being from the U.K. — I have problems with the words “affable” and “salient.” I really like the phrase in your Summary — I connect people — and think you should consider incorporating that into your headline. I like that you clearly establish where you work in your headline and what you do for people. I think highlighting that you’re “well-connected” is great, but I might use “reliable” or another word than affable.

    Lot of typos in the Recommendations. I don’t know if that hurts you or not, but it’s something to think about.

    Bottom line, I think you need to think about who you’re hoping finds you on LinkedIn (client companies, Project Manager candidates, or both) and make sure your headline and Summary speaks to that target audience.

    The good news is that if someone searches on the terms project manager, recruiter, and UK, you show up on the first page of results.

  56. By Russ Boreham on Jul 21, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Peter,

    That’s great feedback, thank you very much. I wasn’t completely sold on affable or salient either so taking on board your thoughts how about:

    Well-connected, reliable Recruitment Partner who connects the UK’s most prominent organisations with Project Managers.

    Recommendations are difficult for typos as I often feel bad asking people to rewrite something! On the plus side at least anyone reading it will know it’s genuine!

    I am definitely hoping that clients find me on LinkedIn. My profile is geared towards being interactive for candidates (box.net files, blog, updates, groups) so they keep coming back and I use my profile organiser to tag and keep in touch with candidates. Luckily a lot of my candidates end up being my clients!

    What I want is for a client to look at my profile and ping me a line if they have a need.

    Any thoughts on the best way to target my summary then? If I’m honest I looked at Jason’s profile and stole his idea for a straight-forward summary outline written informally. Was this the wrong approach to take?

    Thanks again for your thoughts, this is invaluable information!

  57. By Peter Osborne on Jul 21, 2010 | Reply

    How about — and tweak this to feel more British — Well-connected, reliable Recruitment Partner who finds terrific Project Managers for the UK’s most prominent organisations. Makes it a bit more active.

    Regarding what you want, if it doesn’t go against your culture, why not say that: I have a large number of top-flight Project Managers with a broad spectrum of qualifications looking for work with great employers. If you’re looking for someone like that — or you’d like to join the more than XXX people I’ve placed with outstanding companies, ping me a line.

    Just a thought. What do you think, Jason?

  58. By Jennifer on Jul 26, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Jason,

    Loved your post – it made me realize I needed to change my headline from the title/company format to something that doesn’t suck. Here’s what I’ve come up with. I’d love your thoughts.

    Social Media Butterfly who helps connect candidates to clients by building a company’s presence and interaction online.

  59. By Peter Osborne on Jul 26, 2010 | Reply

    Jennifer…I found you easily enough on LinkedIn from the headline, but I’m wondering how many people will use “butterfly” as a search parameter. I think of a butterfly as something that flits from flower or shrub to shrub. Is that the message you want to send?

    I looked at your summary and tried to think about how that synched up with your headline and it didn’t. Maybe you need a better explanation of what you do in your Summary and I would say, “Ah! I get it. I want to hire her or hire her company. Keep in mind that your job is not to sell your company (in most cases); it’s to sell Jennifer. What do you do better than anyone else (or at least better than your peers)? I know you’re new to business, but I want to know why I should hire (or at least call) Jennifer over other recent college graduates. You’ve got some great internships; tell me what you did great! Your picture makes me want to call you (but not in a creepy way). Update the rest of your profile to close the deal. Ask for some more Recommendations. Be more specific in your accomplishments. I think once you do that, you’ll get some different ideas for your headline.

    I hope this helps. Good luck!

  60. By Jennifer on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    Thanks for the advice, I will definitely take some time to follow up. I have to ask: what is it about my picture that makes you want to call me? LOL

    Thanks again,

    Jennifer

  61. By Peter Osborne on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    It looks like you changed your profile because I can’t find you any more, but as I recall it was a nice professional photo that had a smile on it. The fact that you have a photo is great; many people don’t. You were in focus and looked like someone who would add some energy to an office. Little stuff like that is important.

  62. By Jennifer on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    Thanks Peter! I did change my profile summary and heading a bit today. Instead of the previous heading, it now reads:

    “Social media manager who helps connect candidates to clients by building a company’s presence and interaction online.”

    http://www.linkedin.com/myprofile?locale=en_US&report.success=1T2P-sMqsuIhLIatDiNnWvJVeh6sdSQ_aIuk7LuIhDuO4SSsNlXXwnkI2UuW-oSuh9ID8SslaYX8-GSKcGba

  63. By Lou Bonica on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    Jennifer,

    Taking out the word “helps” makes it even stronger (not sure if you want that or not). “Helps” makes it more passive and implies you assist more than actually cause results. “Social media manager who connects candidates…” comes across more in control of the process.

    Lou

  64. By Steve Duncan on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    Jason – you have another blog post to write:”Linkedin Professional Photo: Yours probably sucks”
    8-)

    Are we critiquing photos? My profile is http://www.linkedin.com/in/steveduncan I took it myself, and as soon as budget allows I will hire a pro to do it better.

    Lou – I just changed my headline to remove “helps”, and I think you’re right on.

  65. By Jason Alba on Jul 27, 2010 | Reply

    Guys and gals, I’m kind of sorry for not being more responsive here but I haven’t been for 2 reasons:

    1. I’ve been doing a lot of demos and follow-up with a new product for college career centers… getting lots of interest (that’s good!). I guess you could call that my “day job” :p

    2. Peter is doing such an AWESOME job I don’t want to take anything away from him :p

    BTW, @Steve, your picture looks really cool – I like the B&W … handsome, professional, and different.

  66. By Luís Oresten on Jul 28, 2010 | Reply

    Jason and Peter, I read your notes and my headline really sucks! So, pls take a look at my profile (http://br.linkedin.com/in/luisoresten)and tell me what you think of this one:

    “Transforming test data into product excellence and customer satisfaction”

    Tks!

  67. By Elisabeth Travis on Aug 4, 2010 | Reply

    All,

    I’m not trying revive a dead thread necessarily, but I’m a college student, and I just started my linkedin account. I was doing some searching and stumbled upon this site. BLUF, I have the hardest time coming up with professional profiles and headlines for my resume and linkedin, respectively; so I’m essentially asking for some help.

    I’ll be graduating in May of 2011 and am trying to really get going and tackle the monster that is the Job Market at this point in time. I’ve been interning every summer since my freshman year and I have a good amount of experience in comparison to many young adults my age. I’d like to reference that, along with my desire to learn and work hard.

    SO, without further ado, my current headline is:
    “Professional Student, with Extraodinary Potential,”
    which is clearly, pretty awful.

    Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated! Thank you!

  68. By Duane on Aug 13, 2010 | Reply

    Hi Folks,

    I would love some suggestions and comments on my headline and title: http://nz.linkedin.com/in/duanewilkins

    And welcome any impressions and suggestions!

  69. By Duane on Aug 13, 2010 | Reply

    Here are some of my tests:

    ESRI Geographic Information Systems enthusiast and Project Manager ensuring customers are happy.

    Specialist GIS Project Manager ensuring customer needs are met.

    GIS Project Manager ensuring customer requirements are met, on time, every time.

    Or

    GIS Project Manager experienced in avoiding bullets, rockets, mortars, RPGs, and IEDs.

  70. By Peter Osborne on Aug 13, 2010 | Reply

    These are a bit more difficult.

    Elisabeth, I’d like to see you capture your internships and jobs in the experience section and then make your Summary a bit more on what problems you can solve for a future employer. At the same time, I’d like to see you add something to the Education section that tells me what you’re majoring in and what you’ve done on an extracurricular basis. Once you’ve done that, I’d take one of three approaches on my headline: (1) Be more specific about the problems you can help with; (2) Say something like clectic and say something like, Supported the global NetCentric solution agency for warfighter support (DISO)…while my friends went on Spring Break; or (3) Focus on your Techie/Ethical Hacker skills in your headline. I’ve got a feeling that’s your Purple Cow (the thing that makes you different and marketable) and you’re making it difficult for me to figure that out.

    Duane: Half of the Free World could write that their job is “ensuring customer needs are handled on time within budget.” I think too much of your summary is resume-based and not enough tells me what you do and how you do it and what solutions you provide. Now the people who are searching for someone like you may well know what search terms to use to bring you up on their first screen. But I think you could make this a whole lot more accessible and a lot more interesting and get someone thinking about how you could help them. I’d also like to see some examples of how you’ve brought things in on time and under budget under challenging circumstances. In terms of your sample headlines, I was intrigued by your last one listing different sorts of minefields and didn’t get it right away until I saw your assignment in Afghanistan. I think that’s one you could work with once you figure out a more accessible way to describe what you do XXXX adept at navigating minefields — both in real-life battle zones and in the corporate world.

    Luis: If you live in Brazil, there frankly isn’t enough there for me to give you advice. Your current headline tells me what you do now; it doesn’t tell me what you aspire to do or what problems you solve. Your LinkedIn profile isn’t going to do you any good in its current state, at least for what you’re letting people see. Perhaps Jason can help with this one as I’m pretty sure he has a Premium membership.

    For what it’s worth — and I hope Jason is OK with me doing this — if people reading these comments want some focused help on their profiles, I am taking on clients. I’ve discounted my rate for job-seekers because I know how much it “sucks” out there for us. Take a look at mine and I’ll try to give you something along those lines. Just e-mail me.

    peter@consultantlaunchpad.com

  71. By Anne on Nov 23, 2010 | Reply

    Well I have been reading over everyone’s posts/questions, and I have created the following headline:

    Enthusiastic, Creative & Driven Marketing / Sales Prof.; M.A. in Helping People; I put SERVICE back in Customer Service

    Please note, I have my Master’s Degree in Counseling, but I am trying to get back into marketing/sales! I know I would kick butt in the industry, however, my experience doesn’t back me up. ANY SUGGESTIONS???!! I would love help/need help!

  72. By Robert Collier on Jan 6, 2011 | Reply

    Hi Peter,

    After reading through several links and posts (including, most beneficially, yours), I have created a Headline that I love for the most part; however, it is too long! The headline I have created reads “Action-biased ‘Idea Man’; Blossoming Social Entrepreneur; & Basketball Connoisseur seeking career opportunities in new & small business consulting.”

    Although I could live without the “Action-biased ‘Idea Man,’” I absolutely love the rest. Also, I believe that the aforementioned part of my headline may raise some eyebrows as to what I mean, which I can go into detail about in my summary (an undergrad business law professor coined me as the student organization’s “idea man” due to several projects I conceived including a business I developed for 2 years and a community service project which has grown into a water project in Nicaragua where students travel to assist a local community digging deeper water wells with plans to eventually build a school).

    Can you help me out please?

  73. By Lou Bonica on Jan 8, 2011 | Reply

    Robert,

    I’ll chime in here for what it is worth. I thing you should remove the basketball connoisseur part. I know what you’re getting at and I think that is fine in the summary section. But since the headline has a space limitation I think you should focus on what is germane to the business impact and work the social aspects into other areas.

    Hope that helps.

    Lou

  74. By Jason Alba on Jan 10, 2011 | Reply

    Lou, good input for Robert.

    Robert, honestly, not much of what you wrote does anything for me. I am left wondering what role you play, what value you bring to my organization (or to me, as a client).

    Here’s an idea for brainstorming… fill in this blank:

    I help companies (do what?) by (how?).

  75. By Peter Osborne on Jan 10, 2011 | Reply

    First, you need a Summary for your profile. Tell me what you’re looking for and what you offer a prospective employer.

    As for your Headline…Quirky doesn’t overcome effective. By that I mean you may get someone’s attention but you probably won’t make the sale. I like the idea of action-biased Idea Man but I’m not certain what it means (although I suspect you’re trying to say you’re an Idea Man who knows how to execute. Blossoming Entrepreneur also doesn’t mean what I think you’re trying to say unless your goal is to come across as an entrepreneur who is just starting to come into his own (which isn’t actually a bad thing). I think the whole Basketball Connoisseur thing is cute but I don’t think it advances your objectives and the rest leaves me wondering whether you’re looking for clients or for a consulting firm to hire you.

    Between your summary and your headline, you need to tell me what makes you unique and what you want. You need to do that with keywords that people are using to find someone like you. Idea Man – OK. Blossoming Entrepreneuer – Less likely (and I get 208,000 profiles when I use entrepreneur as a search term on LinkedIn).

    What makes you unique? If the profile for your website gave me an indication of whether you generated any revenue or helped XX students find jobs or something measurable, that would help. Why is it in the past? Did you sell it or abandon it? Your recommendation from Amanda D. says it was very lucrative (and a school project), but the description gives no indication of that.

    Your summary also needs to tie together all that experience, which incidentally is very impressive for someone of your age. I think my problem is that you need to think through your brand. It feels a bit haphazard right now.

    I write headlines after I write the body of the Profile. Then I know what I’m summarizing, which is what a headline is after all. But I’ll give it a try (and will do so again once you think through your Summary): Execution-focused Idea Man, Entrepreneur, and Recent College Grad Who Can Make a Difference on Your Team From Day One.

    If you use that, use your Summary and Job Experience to prove why that’s true.

    Good luck. Let me know if there’s anything I can do to help.

  76. By Duane on Jan 10, 2011 | Reply

    Personally I no longer put much faith into these.

    Here is what I am currently using, but after a few months thought, and reviewing others – something straight forward and descriptive of you or what you are good at is the best thing I believe.

    It needs to be simple, descriptive and give confidence that you are not some wildcard weirdo.

    Who cares if its similar or the same as someone else’s.

    Here’s mine updated today:

    “Facilitating a Diverse Variety of Small to Medium Implementation, Consulting, and Development Projects”

  77. By Robert Collier on Jan 12, 2011 | Reply

    Thank you all very much for your suggestions! I am going to implement them so that my profile and headline reflect your input and give it another shot!

    Thanks,

    Rob

  78. By Salonee on Jan 17, 2011 | Reply

    Hi Jason,

    I’m in my final year of Uni, am job-hunting and just realised the importance of having a strong professional profile on LinkedIn. My professional headline is currently “Creative Powerhouse” but I don’t know if that should be my professional headline. Any suggestions and advice would really be appreciated!

  79. By Anne on Jan 18, 2011 | Reply

    I posted in Novemeber, and didn’t recieve any feedback. I would REALLY appreciate any/all tips or advice, as it seems very helpful (in reference to comments to others). I am new at linkedin, and i’ve included the link to my profile on my resume, which perhaps was a mistake. So input??? Previous post below:

    By Anne on Nov 23, 2010 | Reply

    Well I have been reading over everyone’s posts/questions, and I have created the following headline:

    Enthusiastic, Creative & Driven Marketing / Sales Prof.; M.A. in Helping People; I put SERVICE back in Customer Service

    Please note, I have my Master’s Degree in Counseling, but I am trying to get back into marketing/sales! I know I would kick butt in the industry, however, my experience doesn’t back me up. ANY SUGGESTIONS???!! I would love help/need help!

    http://www.linkedin.com/in/annievaughn

  80. By Ed Han on Jan 18, 2011 | Reply

    Anne, I like the last clause “I put the service back in customer service”: that’s very catchy. Might I suggest inverting the sequence, so you lead with that?

    To me, the abbreviation “Prof.” means “professor”, not professional. But I think the word “professional” is weak here: something stronger is in order. Thousands of people in transition characterize themselves as a [industry/job function] professional. And it’s how I identify people who are job seekers.

    Instead, a more powerful noun might serve. Maybe whiz, ninja, etc?

  81. By Lou Bonica on Jan 18, 2011 | Reply

    Anne,

    I think it sounds a bit better if you put something along the lines of “Creative & driven Marketing / Sales professional who puts service back in Customer Service.”

    I dropped enthusiastic as I think that’s a bit cliche for someone with experience. I’d spell out professional to avoid confusion with professor (Prof.). I don’t think MA in helping people adds much to your story or to the search engines. And finally, while I know you wanted service to stand out and you can’t bold or italic in your headline, all caps comes across as shouting.

    These are just my thoughts. Hope that helps.

  82. By Jason Alba on Jan 18, 2011 | Reply

    @Anne: my thoughts. You should get my DVD… it would help other parts of your profile, also.

    >> Enthusiastic

    isn’t every job seeker?

    >> Creative

    isn’t every job seeker?

    >> Driven

    isn’t every job seeker?

    >> Marketing / Sales Prof.

    ah, now the meat of it, but I’d like to know if you are in MARKETING (analytics, reports, back-office, etc.) or SALES (rainmaker!)…

    >> M.A. in Helping People

    What does that mean? It sounds cute and made-up (many people did the School of Hard Knocks… not real)

    >> I put SERVICE back in Customer Service

    Too cliche

    Can you fill in these blanks?

    I help companies _______ by _______.

    AND THEN, as Peter “The Bulldog” would say, the rest of your profile needs to support this. Change your Summary so it tells stories to support what your Professional Headline is going to say…

    Cool?

  83. By mark on Mar 12, 2011 | Reply

    Craig, your headline doesn’t tell me what you can DO FOR ME.

    - Technologist? Isn’t everybody these days?

    - Entrepreneur? I am one of those, I’m not looking for one.

    - International traveler? Why should I care?

    - Nonprofit leader? Now we are getting somewhere. Say I am CEO of a non profit and I need a leader of some area. What types of things do you lead?

  84. By matija on Apr 22, 2011 | Reply

    hi. love your logic. please help as I am in need. my profile: http://www.linkedin.com/profile/view?id=39192647&trk=tab_pro
    As you can see from my profile and web site, I deal with luxury business, yachts primarily. In short, I need to pamper my clients and usually my services extend to buying property, toys for boy etc for them. This includes my expertise (global) in contracting, laws and regulations (maritime, attorney, contracts, property, regional, different countries etc). As per my web site, my new project is yacht management, charter, crew management (in short one stop shop for boat owners and the ones who want to become one at least for a week).
    Moreover, my education, diligence and generally standpoint on how the business should be attended concentrates on great expertise and getting the job done, in style and with results, good results (as seen in my recommendations).
    I am an international business man, who acts (at the and) as client’s representative, broker, sales rep, project developer, legal advisor, lifestyle consigliere, psychologist, buddy, marriage advisor…whatever it take to get to know my clients, partners in order to HELP them REALISE what ever they want in radius of my knowledge and expertise. If I don’t know something, give me a moment and I’ll learn.

    So, let’s shorten my professional headline ;) !

    kind regards

  85. By Elvira on May 3, 2011 | Reply

    I Am a Science Student who has recently finished my Master’s in Biotechnology. I am Confused as though what can be my Professional Headline. I have no experience as I am a Recent graduate

  86. By Neha.A on May 15, 2011 | Reply

    I am a recent law school graduate. How do I have a headline that is attractive to employers?

    Law school graduate with strong knowledge in I.P and Transactional work seeking Innovative Opportunities

  87. By Priscilla on May 27, 2011 | Reply

    Hi. I would like some advice and suggestions. I’ve been trying to follow what the previous posters have done, but I’m still having a tough time trying to make my Headline work. I’m like a jack of all trades that provides the backbone support of a company and it’s been hard to shorten all my experience into the headline. So far I have:

    Execution-focused Paralegal facilitating case managment, forging client attorney relationship & evidence go-getter

    If anyone can provide any suggestions, advice or help it will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for your time.

  88. By Erin on Jun 24, 2011 | Reply

    Jason,

    I recently joined LinkedIn and am struggling with writing a headline, given my current situation. I graduated with a BA in English in 2008, worked for two years as a Patient Accounts Rep for a large healthcare system, then returned to school for graduate work in Industrial Design in 2010. Industrial Design turned out to be a bad fit for me, so I am looking for employment. I am unsure what to write as my headline, since I do not have enough experience in any given area to ‘brand myself.’ I would like to work either in the corporate or non-profit sector serving children and families in some capacity. Any suggestions? Thanks, Erin

  89. By Terence Oben on Jul 4, 2011 | Reply

    Hi Jason,

    Just fell upon this site and reading your advice to others is like a gold mine. I certainly am in need of your input. I’m a recent law grad. French is my native language as well. I’m studying for the NY bar now and plan on working in and around that geographic area. My primary interest are in banking, investments, reals estate, and consulting. I’m also not bound to these fields given the current job market, so how can my headline and profile be redesigned to fit within these interest. Any and all feedback is welcomed and very much appreciated.

    Thanks,
    Terence

  90. By Luz on Jul 20, 2011 | Reply

    Hi Jason,
    I would really appreciate your feedback on my professional headline.
    I’m considering on going for:

    Sales. Customer Service. Style and Image.

    Is it too impersonal? I’ve change it so many times already and I don’t seem to find the accurate words to say it!

  91. By Megan Larson on Aug 29, 2011 | Reply

    What about…

    Enthusiastic Branding Professional | Social Media Savvy | Quality Leader

    I like everything except “quality leader.” any suggestions???

  92. By Shayna on Oct 14, 2011 | Reply

    I might be late to ask, but I just started revamping my linkedin profile. I am a recent graduate with a degree in Mass Communications – Creative Advertising. I have been having a particularly difficult time formatting my linkedin to show me in the most positive light. For example, although I do not have very much longterm work experience in my field (I am currently a waitress to pay the bills…I’m not adding that on there! Which brings up another issue…how do I use linkedin when I’m “unemployed”?), I have a lot of short-term consulting and internship experience with real clients and companies. These work opportunities were the core to my education in Mass Communications, but on paper they sometimes come across simply as school projects.

    As far as my headline, right now I have:

    Creative Advertiser. Brand Developer. Identity Artisan.

    I’m not really happy with this right now. I was hoping someone could take a look at my profile and offer some first impressions, criticisms, or advice?

    http://www.linkedin.com/shaynadowdy

    Thanks!
    Shayna

  93. By Shayna on Oct 14, 2011 | Reply

    Woops, my linkedin profile is actually at

    http://www.linkedin.com/in/shaynadowdy

  94. By Jana L. McElhaney on Oct 20, 2011 | Reply

    I am new to LinkedIn and would like to start off on the right foot with a great professional headline. So, could you please critique it for me.

    Bringing passionate and outside the box thinking to consulting and project management.

  95. By Ravinder on Nov 6, 2011 | Reply

    i have 21 years of Military aviation experience in diverse fields like Aviation support operations (Schedule planning, Crew rostering, Flight planning, Government liaison, Aeronautical Database Management) and Contract negotiations and execution, HRM, etc. Can i use following headline:
    Expert in Aviation support operations (Schedule planning, Crew rostering, Flight planning, Government liaison, Aeronautical Database Management).
    seems too long for a headline. Kindly advise. Thanks.

  96. By Matt Vazquez on Nov 15, 2011 | Reply

    I am fairly new to linkedin, but as an undergraduate who is looking for employement in an urban setting within the advertising industry, I decided that I want to represent myself as an innovator who can provide fresh talent from the new generation’s perspective…

    Here is my headline…
    “Cultural Ambasador of the Fresh Perspective Generation”

    I would appeciate any feedback on both my linkedin profile and my headline itself. Thanks

  97. By Matt Vazquez on Nov 15, 2011 | Reply

    Ooops, I forgot to include my link, here it is…

    http://www.linkedin.com/in/vazquest

  98. By Howard on Nov 29, 2011 | Reply

    Customer and quality focused business executive who provides the strategic vision and leadership to drive operational process, productivity, efficiency, profitability and bottom-line improvements in the areas of sales, professional services delivery, implementation and customer support.

  99. By Moid on Dec 21, 2011 | Reply

    Yes i met the professional sucky headline criteria as My old one was “Lead internal Auditor at X Bank”
    Kindly comment on my New one”Experienced Audit,Risk and Controls Professional”

    or should i be more creative.my summary supports all of these of my new headline

  100. By amro on Dec 29, 2011 | Reply

    Hi peter,
    I would really appreciate your feedback to check my headline after, after reading few of the posts here I came out with this headline:
    *Bilingual, highly motivated professional seeking new opportunities in Social Media positions*
    http://ch.linkedin.com/in/amromoqbel
    your comments are much appreciated,

    Thanks in advance.

  101. By amro on Dec 29, 2011 | Reply

    Hi Peter,
    I would really appreciate if you could give me a feedback on my headline, i have written it after going through your comments above, i came out with this:
    Bilingual, highly motivated professional seeking new opportunities in Social Media position.

    Thanks in Advance,

  102. By Amber Kelley on Dec 29, 2011 | Reply

    Hello everyone; I hope you had a happy holiday. I have been unemplyed for 7 months and am having a tough time securing a new job. I have enjoyed reading your posts and have learned how easy it is for me to stand out. I need help with a new headline. Any ideas? Thanks!

  103. By Amber Kelley on Jan 5, 2012 | Reply

    I need help with a great headline. Please take a look at my profile; I am open to any and all suggestions. Thank you for your time.

  104. By Jason Alba on Jan 13, 2012 | Reply

    I’m going to finish out a the pending requests, and then close the comments. This has been fun, and Peter Osborne has been AWESOME, but it’s too much to keep up with… an alternative is to pay for my LinkedIn Profile Critique…

    Comments are now closed. Need help with your Professional Headline? That’s included in the LinkedIn Profile Critique (like this and this) Let me know if you want one.  It is currently priced at $99.
  105. By Amber Kelley on Jan 24, 2012 | Reply

    Oops its http://www.linkedin.com/pub/amber-kelley/3a/a15/2b0

  106. By william moore on Feb 1, 2012 | Reply

    cool

  107. By Mr.Charm on May 17, 2012 | Reply

    Hi,

    I am from IT sector. it’s my final year of B.C.A., I don’t know what should be my professional headline. Any suggestions and advice would really be appreciated!

  108. By Lianne on Aug 16, 2012 | Reply

    Hi Peter,

    I loved this chain thread! I know I’m late to the game but I’d love to get your thoughts on my headline: http://www.linkedin.com/in/lianneczhang.

    Thanks so much!

    Lianne

  109. By Danielle Herzig on Sep 4, 2012 | Reply

    I am brand new to linkedin and I just graduated with a BA in International Studies. I honestly have no idea what to put for a headline because I am brand new to the arena. I am hoping to eventually get a job working with government, I just don’t how and where to start. Any suggestions for a headline would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

  110. By James on Dec 21, 2012 | Reply

    HellO!
    Thanks for all your super help.

    I am a young environmentalist with a degree in Sustainable Development and Econmics. I have experience working in climate change, teaching systems thinking courses, and rural development and looking to get into the conservation, land & water, management and restoration field.

    How would this sound?
    “Climate Change, Rural Development, Systems Thinking background | Interest in conservation & restoration”

    Thnx in advance!

  1. 6 Trackback(s)

  2. Jul 15, 2010: LinkedIn Professional Headline Critiques: Awesome! | I'm On LinkedIn - Now What???
  3. Jul 19, 2010: Use LinkedIn to help prospects find you — Consultant Launch Pad
  4. Sep 13, 2010: LinkedIn Headlines: Make yours stand out — Consultant Launch Pad
  5. Feb 10, 2012: JibberJobber Blog » Blog Archive » Favorite Friday: Your LinkedIn Professional Headline Probably Sucks
  6. May 7, 2012: Make an Impact with Your LinkedIn Headline | The Savvy Intern by YouTern
  7. Sep 23, 2013: I’m On LinkedIn – Now What??? » Blog Archive » Great Ideas for Your LinkedIn Profile Professional Headline

Post a Comment